Draft screenplay- The discovered

Black screen- white title Heavy breathing quietly in the background

Quote appears:

"No one ever goes undiscovered" ... - Old Hebrew Proverb

Quote fades out

Flat angle, ground shot

Dark forest/park, as if the camera has been dropped. We hear laboured breathing getting progressively louder and louder as-if the women is getting closer to the camera. The shot is in night vision.

A figure of a woman distressed then appears in the camera shot, she is slowly crawling towards the camera. The scene is quiet apart from her breathing/crying. As she gets closer she reaches out as if to grab the camera, there is a pause of 3 seconds, the woman is just staring into the camera looking very fearfully.

Suddenly the woman is dragged away from the camera from an unseen person/thing.

Diagetic screams until the scene is totally silent, slight pause for 2 seconds.

A flash is used to transition into the next scene.

"Establishing shot It is the next morning and A dog and its owner walk past the dog starts to sniff around the area whilst his owner is calling him. (Creep) build up of a high pitch tone The man then walks over to the dog and the dog uncovers the tent and the owner grabs the dog."

Middle shot

News reporter

"Good morning, I'm here in Kent reporting live from the scene of what looks to be a brutal attack on a young group of friends. As you can see behind me the tent that the friends were planning to camp in is in a severe state. It has been predicted the attack could have taken place between 11pm- 3am, but has yet to be confirmed. Beside me I have the chief investigator PC Rob. What has exactly happened here?"

PC Rob

"I have never seen anything like this before, absolutely nothing, it's obscene what must have been going through the person's head to commit such a crime. We have no official information yet on what happened but we are trying our best."

PC Rob shows the news reporter around the investigation site.

So we cut to the night before with a flash.

here we see her running but only her feet showing, sound are heard of her in distress and sound of her being chased at this point the camera is on floor and a Ground shot is shown.

we cut again to the new reporter

the new reporter is in shock from the sights and get a nudge form the from PC rob that there back on air.

"From here at .......... back to the studio"

silence for 2 sec.... then it cuts (with SFX). Writing Appears. 

The Discovered

Treatment Re-write.....''The Discovered''

After my group discussed our old treatment, we decided to change our initial idea completely.


We will begin our opening sequence with the end of the film, this will draw the audience in. It is going to be set in a park/forest during night, so the atmosphere will be eerie and unsettling. A flat angle, ground shot will be used suggesting that the camera has been dropped by someone that was holding it. In the shot the audience will be able to see some of the surroundings, but not fully.
The audience will then hear heavy breathing getting louder and louder as if someone is coming up to the camera, then a figure of a lady will start crawling toward the camera, she looks very fearful and distressed, covered in blood. As she gets closer she reaches out her hand as if she wants to pick up the camera, she is still crying and breathing heavily, there a pause with her just breathing. Suddenly she gets dragged away and she screams.


A 'flash' is then used as a transition to the day after. It is now early morning and there is a very different atmosphere. A new's reporter is standing in front of the bloody, damaged tent reporting a murder. The scene then cuts and goes onto an investigation of the park. Flashbacks to the night before are shown when the investigators find certain things such as, a drag mark on the grass, we then the see girl getting dragged through the grass.


We intend to focus on our key elements. Our first focus is setting. We decided to set our opening sequence in a park in the night time, so we are able to achieve the effect of eeriness. We are also going to use classical music in parts of our scene as this is a convention of horror films, and creates tension, heavy breathing also is used to build climaxed and get the audience on the edge of their seat. Our main target audience is 15-18 year old.

Questionaire Responses

After collecting our results we have found out that our main target audience are within the age group of 13 - 16. They are 63.6% male and 36.4% female.

The main genres they watch are Comedy with a 45.5% and they said they watch these because they are fun and enjoyable to watch.

54.5% of people said that they like confinement horror which is when they are trapped and 45.5% said that they like pursuit horror. I prefer pursuit horror because its much more fun to watch.

81.8% of people said that they own more than 5 dvd. 18.2% said that they don't own more than 5 dvds.

54.5% said that they would £5 and under for there dvds. 27.3% said they would spend £6 - £8 on dvds and 18.2% said they would spend over £9.

One of the people who took the surveys favourite characters was Danny Dyer who is mainly in action or British Gangster which shows us that he likes action and Gangster films and that is what his dvd collection is going to be mainly.

One of there Favourite films is 'Batman The Dark Knight' which is action based film.

Create your free online surveys with SurveyMonkey, the world's leading questionnaire tool.

The Devil's Backbone was released in 2002 by director Guilermo Del Toro. It is set during the period of the Spanish Civil War in an Orphanage so it's going to be quite old and dark which will make you scared even more. The title is in red which simbolises blood which means there is going to be some blood in the film which means there is going to be death. The font is also quite weird and unusual that looks like chicken scratch and looks like someone has written in blood or something which also connotes that there is going to be death.

 The opening sequence is that there is a shot of a wall and the camera creeps in. Then there is bombs dropping into the city from a plane. Then it's of a boy in a dark room who has just died and has blood pooring from his head and then the camera starts to move out and you see another boy crying which could mean that he was the boys close friend or brother or either he has hurt him. The boy crying puts the body into the water and than you start to see something in the water growing whilst the opening credits are going on. You see the mix of the blood with the dirty water and the camera starts to move around this thing in the water and you start to see this horrible spine growing on him and it looks very demonic and dark, which correlates with the title as it does look like the Devils Backbone. 

The sub heading is also quite unusual and makes you feel scared it is also written in red so connotes blood and death. '' The Living is always more Dangerous than the Dead '' In Horror Films there is always death and it is typical of a horror film and within the first couple minutes you see a young boy who's dead which connotes to us that he could come back and haunt them because the film is about a spirit who comes back to haunt this orphanage. 

The first person you see is the boy in the room with blood over his head and the camera creeps in closely so to see his last emotion and so you could see what is wrong with him. The other boy looks like a troubled kid and lonely kid who has either just killed this boy or was friends with the kid that is dead. The dialogue is spanish which correlates with the Spanish Civil war because it is set within that time period and whilst the Civil war is going on. The boy who is alive speaks with lots of emotion and starts to use metaphors to describe what the dead boy looks like. There is a voiceover when the boy is put into the water which tells us what he the dead boy looks like using metaphors. There is use of music which is quite sad and depressing which shows us that it is sad and emotional. The characters are both wearing old and dirty clothes which could connote that they are living in poverty. 

I think that this film is targeted at people of ages 18 and above because it looks quite demonic and dark and something that people of there age would enjoy more than people of the ages of 14 and 15. 

Treatment Feedback - Group 2

1) From all the feedback that we got given from the class we were told that challenging the conventions was a good idea as it is different from a normal horror. We are challenging the conventions by making everyone die instead of there being a survivor and it stops the cliche of there being a happy ending and shows that there can be a bad ending.

2) What we need to make better is our initial idea and we need to come up with a good idea for our sequence that is not to original or cheesy because I believe that it is going to be hard to include a ghost or monster without our film looking stupid.

3) I will do more genre convention research so that i can get a better understanding of the Horror genre.

Genre initial ideas

Horror

Peer Assessment of opening scene

- Set in East London
- Not your stereotypical american gangsters
- Guy sitting in a chair tied up whilst a group of men (gangsters) stand in front of him and the man in the chair is explaining himself to the group so that they wont kill him but a man pulls out his gun and shoots the man in the chair.
What worked well in my opening scene was that i used the typical use of death and that someone died which is similar to the film 'Goodfellas'. Also had good use of weapons and its typical for gangsters to carry weapons and kill people. What i could of improved was that it could of been more thought through and could of included more speech instead of just saying that the man was talking. I could of also included some shot types and where the scene is set so the audience can get a better idea of the scene.

How is Gender represented in this 'A clubbabble woman' episode from Dalziel and Pacoe?

In this episode gender is reresented in various ways. One way is by the use of mise-en-scene. In the beggining scenes you see men playing rugby which shows us that there sportsmen and then they go into the bar which also connotes that they like a drink after a rugby match and thats where they bond. It then goes to a building where people are wearing suits and police uniform which connotes that they are police and something is going to happen later in the episode which is going to involve the police. The suits also connote to us they have a quite good job and have some money to spend.


There is also the use of camera. for instance when the man is sitting behind the desk it shows his authority as the camera is on a high angle to show you the whole desk and show us what he has on the desk to show what he likes. There is also the use of low angle shots quite alot on the police so that  the police look very powerful.

They also use editing. One type of editing is the theme song as it is non diegetic because the actors can not hear it but you can. They also have the names that pop up on the screen.

Sound is also used in the making o fthis episode. There is the non diegetic sound which is the theme song. They also speak with a northern accent i think so it is near up north. There is also quite a lot of unsettling music which connotes that it is going to be very creepy and unsettling.

Prelim Editing

a) My role whilst editing was that i had to cut bits out of the clips so that we could use the appropriate footage.

b) I did not meet the brief as i broke the 180 degree rule without realising until we started editing. I think the match on action was pretty well done as we stopped it when he was walking to Devon and all of a sudden he was talking to Devon.

Prelim- group 4

Prelim Fliming

We chose our location because it was the appropriate place for a couple as it lets them escape from the real world and have a serious talk with each other with no interferences. We both came up with the park as it lets them talk seriously to each other.

When Filming the 180 degree rule i kept to the left side of actors as you could see them better and it wouldn't confuse the viewer if i changed the side. When i filmed match on action i had Alban walking through the door half way when walking to Devon i stopped and then the camera showed Alban and Devon standing face to face which shows he is going to talk to her.

We changed our story a bit by using Alban as an actor and we also added in an extra few shots so you could see how something was going to happen. We added in where Alban walks up to Devon which connotes he is going to talk to her about asking her to marry him. We also added in where Alban threw the ring on the floor after Devon breaks up with him and then they both walk in opposite directions.

target two

Give more examples instead of waffling on about what is happening in the scene.

Target one - September

To explain things more thoroughly and to use more key terms instead of just telling what happens. I think that i am almost there and need a little bit more work on it and it'll be alright.

Sean and Devons script

Girl is sitting on the bench.

Boy is round the corner looking at the ring.

Extreme close up of the ring.

He smiles then and closes the box and puts it in his pocket and walks through the door to meet her.

Girl stands up and asks.

Girl: (thinking... I knew this wouldn’t last, he is finally going to brake up with me, I really thought he loved me.)  

Girl looks very sad. High angle middle shot of the girl looking very sad.

Girl: What did you want to talk about?

Reverse shot 1

Boy: I think you need to sit down.

Reverse shot 2

Girl: No I think you need to sit down.

Reverse shot 3

Boy: Ok, but we really need to talk about something serious, ive given it a lot of thought Devon and I feel like today is the right day to finally get it off my chest.

Boy looking unusually awkward. Middle shot high angle to show how weak he looks.

Girl: (thinking...oh my god he is actually braking up with me)

Close up of her face.

Girl: You know what, I need to say something first (stands up) I don’t feel like this is working between us, I think its best if we brake up, I’m sorry.

Boy: Your braking up with me?

Girl: Well you obviously thought it wasn’t working. (walks away)

Boy gets ring out of his pocket and looks at it, and then slowly walks away.

Homework over half term

Criminal Minds

1) Who Made the Show?
Criminal minds was made by Jeff Davis.
2) What Channel is it on?
It is on Living TV which is mainly aimed for the 18+ demographic as it has lots of these types of programmes on it.
3) What time is it on?
It is on at 9pm as it is aimed for 18+.
4) What is the Sub-Genre?
It is Action/Suspense as it is about police department and you see a lot of action sequences and a lot of fight scenes. You also see many scenes which show you what the program is going to be about the program and leads up to the ending which creates a lot of suspense.
5) Who is the Target Audience?
The target audience is mainly 18+ as it is on late at night which shows us it has scenes that kids shouldnt be watching.
6)  What was the Narrative?
The BAU is called to apprehend a killer who has struck Detroit for the past three years during Devil's Night, the notorious pre-Halloween celebration.
7) What/who is being represented?
the police are represented as being the good guys and trying to catch this killer. The Killer obviously is being represented as the bad guy as he killed someone and is trying to kill more people and the police have to catch him before its too late.

Pros and Cons Video

<object width="480" height="385"><param name="movie" value="http://www.youtube.com/v/vRD1q8xSBug?fs=1&amp;hl=en_US"></param><param name="allowFullScreen" value="true"></param><param name="allowscriptaccess" value="always"></param><embed src="http://www.youtube.com/v/vRD1q8xSBug?fs=1&amp;hl=en_US" type="application/x-shockwave-flash" allowscriptaccess="always" allowfullscreen="true" width="480" height="385"></embed></object>

DVD Cover Conventions

The Spine of the Cover
The title
the centre image
DVD logo
Reviews
Special Features of the DVD
Synopsis
Size
Barcode

The genre is denoted through one of the reviews on the back cover which says '' A scary Sci-fi flick with wit, energy and attitude!'' which connotes to the audeience that it is a sci-fi film. The picture also dennotes this as it is very unusual and weird.
The people are dennoted as very young people probably late teen years which connotes they are young. The subheading also dennotes that it is in a school as it says '' Take Me to Your Teacher '' so it connotes to us they are running from something in there school.
The Different logos at the bottom of the back cover dennote that this is going to to be in different shops to buy and it connotes to us we can buy it from our dvd store such as HMV or Blocbuster. The ''Dimensions '' logo on the spine of the case shows us who made the film and gives us an insight into what the film is going to be like as they produce certain types of film.
The target audience is dennoted by different logos and images on this cover. The dimensions logo on the spine dennotes that it is for 18+  as they normally make these types of films. the centre image also dennotes to us its 18+ as the picture is quite scary and dark.

wooooooooooooow