Draft screenplay- The discovered

Black screen- white title Heavy breathing quietly in the background

Quote appears:

"No one ever goes undiscovered" ... - Old Hebrew Proverb

Quote fades out

Flat angle, ground shot

Dark forest/park, as if the camera has been dropped. We hear laboured breathing getting progressively louder and louder as-if the women is getting closer to the camera. The shot is in night vision.

A figure of a woman distressed then appears in the camera shot, she is slowly crawling towards the camera. The scene is quiet apart from her breathing/crying. As she gets closer she reaches out as if to grab the camera, there is a pause of 3 seconds, the woman is just staring into the camera looking very fearfully.

Suddenly the woman is dragged away from the camera from an unseen person/thing.

Diagetic screams until the scene is totally silent, slight pause for 2 seconds.

A flash is used to transition into the next scene.

"Establishing shot It is the next morning and A dog and its owner walk past the dog starts to sniff around the area whilst his owner is calling him. (Creep) build up of a high pitch tone The man then walks over to the dog and the dog uncovers the tent and the owner grabs the dog."

Middle shot

News reporter

"Good morning, I'm here in Kent reporting live from the scene of what looks to be a brutal attack on a young group of friends. As you can see behind me the tent that the friends were planning to camp in is in a severe state. It has been predicted the attack could have taken place between 11pm- 3am, but has yet to be confirmed. Beside me I have the chief investigator PC Rob. What has exactly happened here?"

PC Rob

"I have never seen anything like this before, absolutely nothing, it's obscene what must have been going through the person's head to commit such a crime. We have no official information yet on what happened but we are trying our best."

PC Rob shows the news reporter around the investigation site.

So we cut to the night before with a flash.

here we see her running but only her feet showing, sound are heard of her in distress and sound of her being chased at this point the camera is on floor and a Ground shot is shown.

we cut again to the new reporter

the new reporter is in shock from the sights and get a nudge form the from PC rob that there back on air.

"From here at .......... back to the studio"

silence for 2 sec.... then it cuts (with SFX). Writing Appears. 

The Discovered

Treatment Re-write.....''The Discovered''

After my group discussed our old treatment, we decided to change our initial idea completely.


We will begin our opening sequence with the end of the film, this will draw the audience in. It is going to be set in a park/forest during night, so the atmosphere will be eerie and unsettling. A flat angle, ground shot will be used suggesting that the camera has been dropped by someone that was holding it. In the shot the audience will be able to see some of the surroundings, but not fully.
The audience will then hear heavy breathing getting louder and louder as if someone is coming up to the camera, then a figure of a lady will start crawling toward the camera, she looks very fearful and distressed, covered in blood. As she gets closer she reaches out her hand as if she wants to pick up the camera, she is still crying and breathing heavily, there a pause with her just breathing. Suddenly she gets dragged away and she screams.


A 'flash' is then used as a transition to the day after. It is now early morning and there is a very different atmosphere. A new's reporter is standing in front of the bloody, damaged tent reporting a murder. The scene then cuts and goes onto an investigation of the park. Flashbacks to the night before are shown when the investigators find certain things such as, a drag mark on the grass, we then the see girl getting dragged through the grass.


We intend to focus on our key elements. Our first focus is setting. We decided to set our opening sequence in a park in the night time, so we are able to achieve the effect of eeriness. We are also going to use classical music in parts of our scene as this is a convention of horror films, and creates tension, heavy breathing also is used to build climaxed and get the audience on the edge of their seat. Our main target audience is 15-18 year old.

Questionaire Responses

After collecting our results we have found out that our main target audience are within the age group of 13 - 16. They are 63.6% male and 36.4% female.

The main genres they watch are Comedy with a 45.5% and they said they watch these because they are fun and enjoyable to watch.

54.5% of people said that they like confinement horror which is when they are trapped and 45.5% said that they like pursuit horror. I prefer pursuit horror because its much more fun to watch.

81.8% of people said that they own more than 5 dvd. 18.2% said that they don't own more than 5 dvds.

54.5% said that they would £5 and under for there dvds. 27.3% said they would spend £6 - £8 on dvds and 18.2% said they would spend over £9.

One of the people who took the surveys favourite characters was Danny Dyer who is mainly in action or British Gangster which shows us that he likes action and Gangster films and that is what his dvd collection is going to be mainly.

One of there Favourite films is 'Batman The Dark Knight' which is action based film.

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